riccardo wrote:I think any documents like this has to be in legal language, dosen't it?
Maybe its right from that stand point?
You think any documents like this
have to be in legal language,
don't they?
No, they don't. Clear and simple language is fine.
"Nathan Burke or me" makes zero difference in that respect, but is nevertheless correct English ("Nathan Burke or I" is incorrect).
My concern is paragraph 9.
'"Million dollar profits" sound great to the supporters, but where it has been achieved mainly by reducing costs rather than making more money; that we were bottom in 2006 in revenue in the AFL; that our revenue has hardly grown in the last few years, you realise it's not as good as it sounds.'
Omitted words, subject-verb confusion, fragmented sentences ... it's a farking dog's breakfast.
And what's with the multiple pixelated photographs of Nathan Burke (not to mention Bromberg and Klim)? Could they not have got their hands on a camera and taken a quick headshot of Burke in a shirt and tie?